tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1192098709251881925.post1296721404801406571..comments2008-05-02T03:45:05.835-04:00Comments on Arguing To Negotiate/Mediate: Death Penalty MediationTaylorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17021536891301516992noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1192098709251881925.post-87510496342312504542008-04-13T15:36:00.000-04:002008-04-13T15:36:00.000-04:00First of all, I wish it had been more in the form ...First of all, I wish it had been more in the form of a brief than a rough draft, but I'll deal with it. What are the "further resolutions" that need to occur before mediation can be effective? Should these have been in your paper?<BR/><BR/>As a draft, I would suggest to get to your point quicker. Your first paragraph states information that is commonly believed or that could be incorporated into your argument after you point to your stance on the issue. Make sure you have citations for your evidence. It looks as if you have made room for them. Just don't forget to add them. <BR/><BR/>The first sentence of your second paragraph is wordy. What is the "consideration" that needs to be taken?<BR/><BR/>As of right now, I feel like your argument, suggesting the death penalty situation is in a stalemate, is all over the place--back and forth between arguments from both sides. You need to figure out a way to weave your points together more cohesively. If you had a brief it would be easier for me to offer some assistance. Maybe we can discuss this organizational issue in class tomorrow. Good job on working ahead.MR. MILLIONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14428108076968127331noreply@blogger.com